in some countries young people move into their own home in their early twenties.In other countries,young people stay with your parents until their thirties.Why is this happening?what are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations

In most cases the young wants to relocate from their houses to other places at an early age. It is my belief that this is mainly because of the young people's self-confidence and family problems. To tell the truth, i think every person should try to stay without his family members and it has both negative and positive affects.

Primarily, i think if a person puts up with the hardships of the life he will become successful for sure and when he looks at the past he will see that he has endured everything and it will give you a power. On the other hand, you are able to utilize your home easily. One can welcome a romantic atmosphere.

Yet, certain disadvantages prevent us from enjoying advantages gained. It is also true that for our family members it is hard to accept that we have already grown older and our separation may cause some diseases, even heart attack for them. Another reason for a negativeness might be that we are not independent. We are not allowed to invite our friend in their absence let alone to have a party. In addition, if young people did not move to another house in their thirties, they would depend on their father,mother,in one word,family members as it happened to my neighbor. it can not be argued that after a person marries , his children will often act as his parents and,undoubtedly, such attitudes will probably be handed over when you treat your children in the same way as your parents did. you just think you take after them, but you forget on thing by following their mistakes you ruin your grandchildren's future and come to nothing.
In the epilogue, i can conclude that the more countries we have, the more differences we observe. i prefer to move at an early age actually. But i person should make their mind,find and keep the gold middle.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, may, so, i think, in addition, in most cases, in the same way, on the other hand, to tell the truth

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.603125 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63760476198 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58125 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7056998879 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0625 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244687906154 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726129564026 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709269924867 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131603662193 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668035774698 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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