In some country, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school leavers’s decision. Give your own opinion.

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In some country, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school leavers’s decision. Give your own opinion.

It is stated that some postgraduated students of high school are making decision whether to start a job or to take a trip for some time before university life. While I agree that there are some drawbacks of this decision, I would argue that it is more needed to spend their gap year on working or travelling.

The choice to get a job right after graduation is disadvantageous to some extent. The main weakness is that those graduates will surely move up the career ladder not sooner than their fellows who choose not to start working initially. Therefore, being promoted is bounds to be delayed. Moreover, total expense for travelling, including accommodation and daily-meal spending is too prohibitive to afford to some of their parents. It is not advisable that people should take this option.

On the other hand, it appears to get a variety of strong points if school leavers arrange some jobs or take some trips in order to take advantage of the time for their gap year. A substantial benefit is valuable experience which can be acquired by doing a wide range of part-time jobs or volunteering in charity organizations. My sister, for example, recognized that knowledge gained from ‘’Green Summer” campagne is attributable for her efficient and fluent work flow right now. In addition, travelling also helps out graduates to define their specialities and preference which will facilitate the entry to their dream work in the future.

In conclusion, i believe that those decision from high school leavers will bring about a lot of significant advantages, however, going for a trip or getting a job still has some definite limitatioN before entering the university. (281 words)

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07857142857 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97468056937 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603571428571 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9928287689 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329090654888 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949336372232 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894159104909 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203439062782 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554144112694 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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