In some culture, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In many countries, parents and teachers always teach children that their dreams will come true if they are diligent enough. While this belief can encourage children to work hard, under some circumstances, it may put extra stress on them. To my mind, children are able to achieve some things by working hard but definitely not everything.
To begin with, conveying the message that working hard plays a significant role in achievement has a positive influence on children. As the old saying says no pain no gain, people need to struggle to have progress on most of the things. For instance, when students spend more time studying, it is highly possible that they can improve their academic performance. Therefore, children should be motivated to work hard due to the relevance between efforts and effects
To consider another side, there are various disadvantages if adults over-emphasize the importance of trying hard. People tend to blame themselves for not struggling enough when they could not gain what they want. However, in fact, success relies on not only diligence but also other factors, such as luck and timing, which cannot be controlled and predicted by people. Consequently, children may live under great pressure or maybe with mental health issues. It is harmful to children to think that they always need to work harder otherwise unsuccess would be totally their fault.
In conclude, teaching children to do their best is beneficial for their personal achievement. In the meanwhile, adults should keep it in mind that diligence is not the only matter, hence should not blame children for not trying hard enough all the time.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1375464684 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66258215033 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635687732342 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4029378132 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.307692308 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340317945266 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114106934848 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639149514863 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204628329328 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610417853544 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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