In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Nowadays, public concern has arisen about whether teaching young children that effort is the key for every achievements can help them build up a vibrant personality or not. In this essay, I will explain both views and give my own opinion.
On the one hand, numerous cultures consider attempting as the first-needed and essential quality of a standard citizen and want every generations to obtain it. It is a common belief that this kind of messages can draw in their mind a basic foundation of a social member. Therefore, children can be more positive to deal with failures and dare to dream as well as achieve their ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an critical factor of a successful person as nothing is easy to acquire.
On the other hand, many people assert that trying hard is not the only quality needed for children. This kind of education, however, can lead to misunderstanding about how to deal with trouble and achieve goals. To be extract, they may become idealistic dreamers who always try their best to obtain an impossible results and cannot evaluate things in many aspects. Sometimes, they give no care to risks and challenges that they may encounter and put the others in difficult situations. It is also means these children are more conventional because they are easy to be disappointed and lose the ability to dream and cope with problems.
All things considered, I firmly believe that there are other approaches to educated a child about efforts. Also, I suggest that we should help them have a both positive and realistic vision of their life, which I believe is soundly based on the above reasons I have presented.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun case seems to be countable; consider using: 'many cases'.
Suggestion: many cases
... as well as achieve their ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an critical factor of a...
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Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an critical factor of a successful person ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, kind of, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86170212766 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68551182157 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602836879433 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.757497763 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.461538462 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254513515444 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794230788647 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458114033731 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13203473536 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881206211146 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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