Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, it is undeniable that music plays an important role in our life, as it can be seen everywhere. While, some educationalists think that all children should be taught how to play a musical instrument, others argue that it should not be taught to their child. In this passage, both views will be discussed.
On the one hand, playing an instrument can distract children from doing more important tasks. Firstly, learning how to play an instrument occupies one’s time to study. For instance, learning how to play a difficult instrument like piano will take 2 to 3 hours a day, which won’t let the child study. Moreover, practicing harder and harder is needed to achieve the highest prize in the competition, if they attended. This make them lacks time studying even more. Secondly, not everyone is interested in playing an musical instrument. Some might feel more excited to study biology, chemistry, etc. Therefore, they won’t want to play any instrument. Thinking it is essential and forcing them to play is worse for them in this situation.
Despite the aforementioned facts, learning how to play an instrument does have its merits. Firstly, it train children’s positive personalities. It requires a lot of passion and patience to master an instrument, therefore they must be very hard-working. This may effect their behavior at home and school. Furthermore, children won’t feel lonely playing an instrument, as the musical soul of the instrument will be their friend as they play. Some will also find their passionate in playing instruments, which will develope into their career in the future. Many instrumentalists are being on top of the society, being famous and wealthy.
In conclusion, despite the disadvantages bringing to the one which doesn’t have an interest, the path and values playing instruments open for passionate children outweigh the drawbacks. The way to solve the idea is to teach the ones who are interested, and don’t for the rest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16459627329 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95818661042 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555900621118 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6050606909 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1904761905 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289371931344 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897554635999 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833670505224 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192054202245 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113594458128 0.056905535591 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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