Some parents believe that children in their leisure time should be involved in educational activities. While others believe it adds to much pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In contemporary settings, the vast majority of guardians have been attaching more importance to their offspring’s academic education. Therefore, they believe that children should engage in some activities with educational value. However, I believe that this is detrimental to their upbringing.
It is understandable that spending free time on this kind of activities enables children to obtain a reputable academic qualification in the future and gain an edge in the job market. To be more specific, children who devote enough hours to academic activities are more likely to get high marks and be admitted into well-known universities. Thus, compared to those underachievers with low score, they have a higher possibility of achieving promising career prospects, especially in China, a country with enormous population and ruthless competition.
However, this will make children lose the chance / opportunity to relax themselves and lead to / result in some undesirable consequences. On the one hand, this daily routine may result in a sedentary lifestyle which the majority of school children are adopting, and thus increase the possibilities of them suffering from some diseases like obesity, poor eyesight and lethargy which damage their health. On the other hand, if students are required to focus on their academic activities for several hours on end, they are more likely to feel exhausted or bored, resulting in low working efficiency. By contrast, if they are allowed to do some recreational activities during or after school hours, their brains can be discharged, and they will have a refreshed mind, facilitating their academic learning and thus making them capable of concentrating on learning subjects.
In conclusion, while focusing on academic activities may have a minor chance of helping students achieve outstanding academic performance and promising career prosperity, it brings about more drawbacks including health problems and lack of focus in studies.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10690795918 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586666666667 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.713251365 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2727272727 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204054551672 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896298583321 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748112568978 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128110820419 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732973259592 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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