some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. others think there are much wider benefits of university education. discuss both views and give your opinion.
While a few think that the ultimate purpose of university studies is to aid individuals for getting high paid jobs, many others are of the view that, university education should deals with much broader aspects of life, and benefits individuals and society in many other ways. However, in my opinion, university education should focus not only on job prospects but also to the overall development of an individual.
It is generally accepted that, high paid job alone does not make a person successful in their life. In other words, success of a person determined by many other contributing factors such as trust, leadership qualities, and cognitive thinking and reasoning which should be acquired from a university or related institutions. For instance, a person may get a high profile job based on his academic performance but the successful and long standing career in the the same institution depends on many other non academic factors and performances. The same is applicable in the existence of an individual in family and society.
More over, many universities and colleges also focus on other aspects of life such as sports and arts which spreads the idea that academic subjects and high income jobs are not the only areas aim by these institutions. To add on, applicants with high performance background in extra curricular activities often get priority at the time of university admission.
however, it has to be admitted that, universities should give prioroty for their graduates to get a better job which is essential for today's competetive world and tight job markets. For example, if university education does not meet the criterias for getting better jobs, then I doubt if anyone will go for further university studies.
In conclusion, eventhough I believe that, the primary goal of university education is to help graduates to better jobs, there are many other bebefits from university education for individuals and society as a whole.
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university education should deals with
university education should deal with
In other words, success of a person determined by many other contributing factors
In other words, success of a person is determined by many other contributing factors
Sentence: For instance, a person may get a high profile job based on his academic performance but the successful and long standing career in the the same institution depends on many other non academic factors and performances.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by an article
Suggestion: Refer to the and the
Sentence: however, it has to be admitted that, universities should give prioroty for their graduates to get a better job which is essential for today's competetive world and tight job markets.
Error: competetive Suggestion: competitive
Error: prioroty Suggestion: priority
Sentence: For example, if university education does not meet the criterias for getting better jobs, then I doubt if anyone will go for further university studies.
Error: criterias Suggestion: criteria
Sentence: In conclusion, eventhough I believe that, the primary goal of university education is to help graduates to better jobs, there are many other bebefits from university education for individuals and society as a whole.
Error: bebefits Suggestion: benefits
Error: eventhough Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1601 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.05 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.85 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.223 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.678 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... successful and long standing career in the the same institution depends on many other ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... successful and long standing career in the the same institution depends on many other ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...at the time of university admission. however, it has to be admitted that, universiti...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'as for', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276657060519 0.247107183377 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.121037463977 0.155533422707 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.14409221902 0.0946595960268 152% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0374639769452 0.0501214627716 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0230547550432 0.0437548338989 53% => OK
Prepositions: 0.149855907781 0.122226691241 123% => OK
Participles: 0.0374639769452 0.0403226058552 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9079527566 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0201729106628 0.0326793684256 62% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0691642651297 0.0861772015684 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0172910662824 0.021408717616 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00864553314121 0.011925033212 72% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1958.0 1933.35771543 101% => OK
No of words: 317.0 316.048096192 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17665615142 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.362776025237 0.374742101984 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.299684542587 0.28420135186 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.236593059937 0.203846283523 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.167192429022 0.137316102897 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9079527566 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.037074148 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523659305994 0.56093040696 93% => OK
Word variations: 54.094767391 60.7387585426 89% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0891783567 68% => OK
Sentence length: 28.8181818182 20.7743622355 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8730644026 49.517814964 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.0 127.492653851 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8181818182 20.7743622355 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.45454545455 0.814263465372 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 58.7866360769 49.1944974215 119% => OK
Elegance: 2.55555555556 1.69124875643 151% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37485261659 0.332605444948 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123867832954 0.102741220458 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0507966125841 0.0668466124924 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.654598079825 0.534860350844 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167437204962 0.148594505496 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166341766644 0.134430193775 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10906352995 0.0742795772207 147% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.290844748383 0.324371583561 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.108987611547 0.0638462369009 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25895641744 0.228012699653 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110069213104 0.058150111329 189% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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