Some people believe that the best way to improve the general well-being of schoolchildren is to make physical education compulsory in all school. Others, however, think that this would have a little effect on overall health and that other measures are needed.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is acknowledged that sports play a pivotal role in our lives. However, the impact of physical education on student health remains a polarizing topic. While a school of thought holds that making PE an obligatory subject is the optimal method in other to improve the general health of schoolchildren, others claim that this has just a small impact. I can therefore only partly agree with the assertion that PE should be compulsory.
It is understandable why some people advocate for all schools to have physical education as one of the main subjects. First, sports help to boost both physical and mental health of schoolchildren. For example, when students do exercises frequently, they will not only prevent themselves from severe health diseases, but their cognitive skills will also be improved. American schools perfectly exemplify this situation. American students are trained earnestly in sports, and they have physical education lessons pretty often. Therefore, they look healthier in both strength and physique in comparison with the Asian ones who do not take exercises seriously. For these reasons, it seems sensible that making physical education obligatory in school is the optimum way to improve schoolchildren’s health.
On the other hand, I am of the opinion that the aforementioned method would bring adverse effects on students in some cases. The fact that schoolchildren nowadays have a host of subjects to study leads to a manifold of problems. For instance, there are a lot of assignments for them to do and cramming is not an unfamiliar thing when it comes to examination. Therefore, they show a tendency to being fatigued, stressed and less active. If schools force children to do exercises, it will be hard for them to focus on the other subjects that are more crucial, such as Maths, literature, etc. Moreover, the state of being healthy does not only depend on exercising but also on people’s diet. It can be seen that young people in this modern age are more likely to digest a lot of junk food which contains harmful substances for their health. This less nutritious food may cause them to suffer from some intense health issues, namely diabetes, heart problems, etc. Consequently, physical education is not a necessary method and some culinary nutrition courses should be applied to the curriculum instead.
In conclusion, while there may be reasons to support making sports compulsory at school, I believe that the proposed solutions would go a long way in improving the health of schoolchildren.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2020-05-03 | lhd_sunny | 67 | view |
| 2018-01-25 | giangchu210 | 70 | view |
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 412.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15533980583 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93389480255 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546116504854 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3138371007 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.142857143 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.619047619 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360507569949 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969130481463 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775234001209 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225165167215 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165087238954 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.