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Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problem less important. Disscuss both view and give your opinion.

Essay topics: Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problem less important. Disscuss both view and give your opinion.

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Many people believe that global aid organization often borrow celebrities’ power to raise public awareness of social issues such as poverty reduction or helping orphanages. While others suppose that this activity of famous people might downplay the significant of problems, I would argue that this trend will bring more positive changes to society.
On one hand, associations repose trust in celebrities to attract community due to their far – reaching influence. Firstly, famous people are paid attention not only by international fandom but also mass media all over the world. For example, the artist Leonardo Dicario is invited to become global embassador of International Fund for Animal Welfare IFAW in order to raise public concern about protecting wild animal. Thanks to his involvement, over 7 million people in 15 countries participated in the preserving wild animal movement. In addition, people are more likely to give donation when they are called by the ones they admired. For example, a famous singer is easily to be able ask their fan to give money in helping the poor community. In short, people will mutually help the needy by fund raising as well as other contributions.
On the other hand, there are some drawbacks if a wrong celebrity are presented in global campaign. Firstly, Some of famous people leads unhealthy life style. For example, a famous movies star Kevin McCallister who is famous from the movie named Home Alone however he is a drug addition. This leads people to have a bad impression about him. Therefore, he is a bad example for the one who will present international aid organizations. Furthermore, Some superstars only want to increase their fame by participating in community campaign rather than convey the intended message of organizations. As a result, since without passion working directly with organizations, the involvement of celebrities might be neglected and boycotted.
In conclusion, although involvement of superstars in global aid organizations will have some negative impacts to society, it seems to me that their action will bring more positive changes to community.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in short, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3224852071 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00098748964 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597633136095 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8368887409 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.823529412 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7647058824 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240063457399 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758856275592 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457561717531 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140335088935 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506934103052 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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