Some people believe famous people s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems Others think celebrities make the problem less important Disscuss both view and give your opinion

The involvement of many renowned people in assisting international aid projects has become a subject of controversy in recent years. While there are some negative opinions towards this issue, I personally believe that these supports have much potential in attracting more attention from the public.
On the one hand, the reasons why people insist that celebrities are likely to weaken the importance of non-profit assistance are as follow. Since famous people attract the public through their image, the crowd will only focus on their stars rather than the existing problems. As a result, campaigns that borrow well-known ones sometimes end up publishing for them alone instead of the initial target. Moreover, if the artists join in the programs, other citizens will consider there are already available fund. Therefore, they no longer need to support for the underpriviledge.
On the other hand, there are many benefits inviting super stars to participate in charity activities. Firstly, they are so influential that the media will spend a large proportion of their time showing the related news and bring the information to larger number of viewers. Secondly, because of the famous stars, more of the inhabitants can be able to access things which they have never concerned before. Thus, it helps widen the amount of donation given for the needed organizations.
In conclusion, although well-known people can be a problem to aid program, they have more advantage in getting success for an aid to disadvantaged places.

Votes
Average: 3.3 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 130, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...importance of non-profit assistance are as follow. Since famous people attract the public...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 242.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29752066116 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82404083037 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.661157024793 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7747190618 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.833333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184016863511 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556913151716 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496304209595 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111270050621 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619800036077 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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