Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
People have differing opinions about whether support from celebrities for international aid organisations exposes the problems to public’s attention. I my opinion, although in some cases celebrities become the focus instead of the problems themselves, famous people make many problems comes to people’s attention.
On the one hand, instead of knowing the problems, the public would give all their attention to the celebrities in some cases. For example, if a public figure supporting animal protection were found cheating on his or her spouse, what people focus would become this famous person’s individual life for a long time rather than what a severe situation animals are faced. Also, when a famous individual accepts bribe during their support towards an organisation fighting for gender equality, what comes to the public’s attention would be the financial scandal rather than the importance of eradicating gender discrimination.
On the other hand, however, I would argue that the help of celebrities makes it possible for more people to realize the problems and help to solve them. Tin Lok, a famous actor in Hong Kong, for instance, helps charity to build thousands of schools in the rural areas of China, so children living in poverty can still have the chance to receive education. His fans follow his cause and donate money, food as well as cloth to children in these regions every year. Besides, speaking loudly for the right to marry for same-sex couples to support organisations fighting for the rights of homosexual individuals, Lady Gaga led her fans to know that love is equal regardless of gender.
In conclusion, while the misconduct of celebrities may divide the public’s attention from the problems, I believe that in most cases they really highlight the problems we have and attract more people to do something to combat the situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'problems'' or 'problem's'?
Suggestion: problems'; problem's
...ems themselves, famous people make many problems comes to people's attention. On...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, really, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in most cases, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31666666667 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91612185388 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.8831013206 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.5 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.6 7.06120827912 235% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270533847873 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115860861232 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860025355907 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179825618223 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832916959773 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.