Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some hobbies are relative easy, but others are quite challenging. Personally I believe that both types of hobby can be fun and enjoyable. And therefore, I disagree with people who think hobbies need to be difficult to enjoy.
Firstly, there are tons of hobbies are very fun and helpful nowadays, but these hobbies are also very to do and achieve. Football and basketball for example, these two hobbies are very famous and popular, and playing these sport activities are not too hard. In contrast to be a pro-player is a hardship and it even take a lot of time. But in my opinion, each has its own perks and there are still be enjoyable in both views.
On the other hand, we do not need to make our hobbies to be difficult and we should not force ourselves to find a difficult one. Those hard hobbies may be more interesting than easy hobbies. In some cases, the easy way is not always the best way, playing chess for instant, it might be interesting in the first place but when we play better. In my case, it took me over two years before I became competent at this activity. But now I enjoy it much more than when did I started. I believe that hobbies gave us more pleasure when we reach a higher level of performance because the results are better and the feeling of achievement is better.
In conclusion, simple hobbies can be fun and relaxing, difficult hobbies gave us more feeling of excited and enjoyable for different reasons. But simple hobbies do not need to be difficult to be enjoyable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
... a pro-player is a hardship and it even take a lot of time. But in my opinion, each ...
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Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...h has its own perks and there are still be enjoyable in both views. On the other...
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Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
... playing chess for instant, it might be interesting in the first place but when we play bet...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, in my opinion, in some cases, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1234.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53676470588 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51466288233 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525735294118 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3807229372 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.2666666667 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1333333333 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39421423623 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149030411343 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142185109887 0.0667982634062 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280809158141 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118761564284 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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