Some people believe that physical fitness of strong individual and teams is the reason for most sport achievements. Others think that mental attitude is more important. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is true that nowadays sport is encouraging many people to praticipate in. While some people argue that level of iq and intelligence is essential, i believe that physical development and strength is directly related with majority of success.
On the one hand, there are various reasons why many people agree that the mental developmet is crucial. They believe that, sharp minded individuals are highly regarded as a successors due to their cognitive skills such as ability to quickly analyze and solve problems, they are likely to generate new ideas. To be specific, the pioneer of facebook community the Mark Schoenberg used his ideas to connect whole world. That unbelievable approach has played a key role factor in his future progress. Besides that, the being extraordinary mental developed individual means he has the ability to respond and invent new strategies which is required in different types of sport.
On the other hand, i would advocate with those who contend that, the essentiality of owners of physical fitness is a reason for country to accomplish name and fame. For instance, the basketball team with Michael Jordan who is the strongest basketball player has played a numberous games and risen their team to the top 10 of billboard. Therefore, physical firness is important for team to take their country name and praise all over the world. Moreover, there is a great deal of athletes such as Artur Taymazov and others who had earned their medals and became famous due to their physical fitness.
In conclusion, even though the level of intelligence intelligence is recognized as important by many individuals, i would argue that the essentiality of physical development is undeniable.

Votes
Average: 9.1 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1654676259 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83181953957 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579136690647 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8966983584 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184985460209 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062156882318 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393951664867 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953222413744 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447090242468 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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