Some people believe that time spent on TV, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe that this has negative effects on a child.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
With the ever-increasing use of TV and video games, many people subscribe to the view that this trend has a positive influence on children’s knowledge. Yet, the idea meets with opposition from those who claim that spending time on TV and computer games brings harm to adolescents. This essay will elaborate on both perspectives, and I believe that this trend may not affect the development of children as exaggerated.
On the one hand, it is understandable why many children devote the quality of their time playing games and watching TV. As for education potentials, there is a wide variety of educational programs appearing daily on the TV. As a result, children may have a chance to access a variety of information through some programs such as scientific breakthroughs, space exploration, and medicine. Moreover, video games have consistently been proven to enable game players to promote cooperation, creativity, and problem-solving skills, which contributes to better academic performance. For example, while playing Pubg, children can plan to win against their opponent.
However, many people claim that playing games is detrimental to teenagers. Firstly, checking phones or laptops is considered to be far more preferred to spending quality time with parents, which may widen the generation gap, causing conflicts among relatives. Secondly, they may spend endless hours surfing the Internet, playing video games rather than taking part in other physical activities, which results in an early sedentary lifestyle and children’s suffering from obesity, diabetes, and heart diseases.
In conclusion, while I recognize some negative effects of using TV and video or computer games, I claim this trend as positive one
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50936329588 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07707934369 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614232209738 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8963000195 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.583333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1666666667 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291349796436 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971691455817 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552194303872 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174297438556 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607200117316 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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