Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a complusory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are people who advocate that high-schoolers ought to be doing volunteering activites as a part of their school curriculum while there are people who doubt this suggestion. Although I am in favour of the ideology behind this, I would side with the ones who disagree since this attempt would be unpragmatic in practical situation.
Firstly, high-school years are period of the life-changing for young adults since they will be considering which college they want to go or what to do after high school . Basically ,since it is the final step toward the teritary education, the lessons and activites are seemed to be more overwhelming than the previous school years. There will be a lot in the students'plate as ones who are ambitious will be seeking extra-curriculular activities whereas ones are trying to comprehend the lessons provided,enjoying the mere months they have as high-schoolers. Amidst the tight schedule, adding unpaid community service as compulsory course would be unfavourable for young adults which can consequently lead them to find those activities as boring or exhausting although they are mentally satisfying jobs.
Secondly, the juveniles have fun in choosing what they want to do in addition to school curriculum since they do have various interests. One may go to Sports club while one prefers membership in literature club as something to devote within their limited time after school lessons. Indeed,there are the young people who choose to participate in philantrophy activities such as local Red-Cross organization or Care teams.
Some people worry about the lessening altruistic nature among young people these days. However, schools have been occasionally carrying out community services that students can participate where one can also find his or her truest form of altrusim. In fact, altrusim can be promoted not only from volunteering service but also through classroom interaction.
To sum up,making philantrophic activities as compulsory in curriculum is preferrable ideolgically Nonetheless, it seemed to be unneccessary and might give the students wrong idea or feeling towards this novel activity.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ugh classroom interaction. To sum up,making philantrophic activities as compulsory ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, in addition, in fact, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48795180723 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17127638828 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58734939759 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3226507846 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.153846154 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201991897537 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704072992556 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455289207056 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980108528938 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487955149233 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nt to go or what to do after high school . Basically ,since it is the final step t...
^^
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...what to do after high school . Basically ,since it is the final step toward the te...
^^
Line 3, column 505, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , enjoying
...rying to comprehend the lessons provided,enjoying the mere months they have as high-schoo...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...s as boring or exhausting although they are mentally satisfying jobs. Secondly, the juveniles have ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...imited time after school lessons. Indeed,there are the young people who choose to part...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , making
...ugh classroom interaction. To sum up,making philantrophic activities as compulsory ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, in addition, in fact, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48795180723 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17127638828 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58734939759 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3226507846 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.153846154 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201991897537 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704072992556 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455289207056 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980108528938 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487955149233 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.