Some people believes that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. Do you agree or disagree
Many people believe that all teenagers should be obliged to contribute to the local community on an unpaid basis since this would be beneficial for both individuals and society. I disagree that we should force all young people to do unpaid work and expect social gaining from it.
In my opinion, most young people have already been burdened with much pressure from their curricula and extra-activities. Academic performance-centred schooling is now as demanding as a full-time job since educators always push their students to catch up with the grind. Otherwise, they might leave themselves behind with their studies. When teenagers can spare some time, they should be encouraged to engage in leisure pursuits. For example, participating in a sports team or joining an art class would equip them with opportunities to hone teamwork skills or excavate the art prodigy from within that could go along way in life. Additionally, they have many years of working ahead of them after their graduation.
At the same time, I do not believe that society would reap much from forcing teenagers to do unpaid work. It would be paradoxical to have young people do unsalaried work without letting them make their own decisions while other people doing the same work can get paid. Doing this would trigger resentment among teenagers and their parents since it goes against an equal society's values. Furthermore, without any remunerative encouragement, teenagers tend to opt out of responsibilities and do things in a lacklustre manner, which would lead to counter-productive results.
In conclusion, I disagree that ones with power should not force young people to do work without pay since that would not be beneficial as expected. Instead, teenagers should be encouraged to work on a volunteer basis
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a lacklustre manner" with adverb for "lacklustre"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...t out of responsibilities and do things in a lacklustre manner, which would lead to counter-productive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21453287197 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01515748753 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574394463668 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1912555018 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.642857143 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402207508369 0.244688304435 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144271147551 0.084324248473 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922776814005 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262019999863 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822139481832 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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