Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree?
it is argued that advanced technology could replace museums and art galleries. In my opinion, although the internet can help people see pictures and objects vividly, we still need a memorial house and an art exhibition.
On the one hand, people want to see a historical object and an artificial online because they find it extremely convenient. Firstly, under the objects, it will have a typing a few characters; and the online users do not need to listen to a long history of it to understand. Secondly, unlike museums and art galleries opened in fixed hours. people can access a piece of information on the internet or through their smartphone at any time of a day. For example, I had to do research relating to Vietnam's war; however, I did not have sufficient time to go to the Ho Chi Minh museum. Therefore, the only way I could do was that I found it on Google. Last but not least, thanks to cutting-edge technologies, we are able to see the details of the objects. With a click, for instance, people can zoom in and out a picture to see the texture of a piece of painting which sometimes we hardly do it by our naked eyes.
On the other hand, I strongly disagree with the idea that we cannot completely dismiss a public museum and an art gallery. memorial houses and art museums offer the first-hand experience to visitors so that they can sense the atmosphere of historical events. Moreover, these places always have a storyteller to talk about the events; and most of the visitors would rather be keen on than see on the internet. In addition, artificial works and artistic creations are the value of one's country and attractive to foreign visitors. Thus, if we destroy the museums and art galleries, a country will lose tons of national's budget. This is a reason why we should maintain the museums and art exhibition's operation.
In conclusion, although the internet will be convenient for people to see masterpiece and objects of history, it is unable to replace public museums and art galleries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74431818182 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76794949764 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542613636364 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8695211437 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2352941176 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4117647059 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339452780913 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101998290637 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565259441512 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213547362891 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264822384849 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.