Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number
of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public
health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some would argue that raising the number of amenities related to sports is the best way to make public health better, while others argue that other steps should be taken. While increasing the number of sports facilities helps to improve community health, I believe that raising awareness about the benefits of sports on people’s health is a better way.
On the one hand, creating more places to play sports allow more persons to participate in games as everyone gets a chance to play. Therefore, more people are playing means that more persons are becoming healthy. For example, in 2010, Canada had increased the Hockey facilities from 40 to 70 to attract more public to involve in the hockey game, according to CBC news. However, I think that it is better to make people aware of sports advantages on their health.
On the other hand, using other measures like providing information about the beneficial effects of games on our body helps the public to understand the importance of sports in our lives. They should be told how playing a game boosts our immune system and that immunity helps to fight various diseases like the common cold. For instance, to raise the importance of games in students, the Public Health Agency of Canada, made it mandatory in high schools in Canada to provide education about the benefits of playing games on health.
In conclusion, although providing more game facilities improve public health, it is not the best way. Other measures, such as providing more knowledge about the beneficial effects of sports on one’s health, are better.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98863636364 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46348155893 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503787878788 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8731459581 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.727272727 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301468071357 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132857533139 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968144436443 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21371062652 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103255683503 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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