Some people say that family has the most powerful influence on a child's development. However, other people say that other influences (music, other people) have the greatest influence on children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that some skeptics would advocate that families play an indispensable role in the children’s lives. Nevertheless, there are others who argue that some influences such as other people and music are also important factors for the maturation of children. In this essay, I will outline some rational reasons to support the latter idea.
First of all, some people believe that members of the family who play a role as the reliable sources of financial and mental supports are the most considerable contributors to the development of the young generation. Indeed, families in general and parents in particular often use their salaries to guarantee the best education and living conditions for their children. Moreover, children are usually received affection and protection from their families which may benefit their emotions and feelings. Consequently, with the combination of those two key factors, youngsters can be right oriented and well-educated which leads to the appropriate development of them in the future.
However, I believe that other factors can outweigh families in terms of the fact that knowledge which may hardly be taught by just parents can be improved rapidly by learning from external society. Firstly, regarding outside influences, not only can children learn more social skills such as communication and leadership but they can also enrich their knowledge. For example, doing voluntary work which creates more opportunities to collaborate with other people is an effective way for children in order to get on with them and gain new experiences for themselves. Secondly, music which may be difficult to teach by parents but can be found easily in some recreative programs and videos also exemplifies an ideal factor to improve children’s mental ability and emotions.
In conclusion, although the importance of families is undeniable, I highly appreciate that children should learn through various external sources and social activities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49673202614 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99332847825 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.3308615043 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.166666667 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.5 7.06120827912 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190365455856 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727583082751 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881818312444 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120845050189 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852472197915 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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