Some people say that family has the most powerful influence on a child’s development; however, others say that influences outside the family play a bigger role on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many hold a belief that family plays the most important role in contributing to the growth of children; while opponents argue that outside environments are more likely to affect children than family. To the best of my knowledge, the later point of view is more reasonable for the following reasons.
Firstly, it is note-worthy that the emergency of technical devices is inclined to impact on a child’s development. To be specific, the growing trend of electronic products has given users swiff and convenient access to various entertainment modes like social media, Facebook or Instagram. For example, according to the survey conducted by BBC News, there are many video clips and films on the Internet that children may imitate the characters. Another factor that influences children is their friends. Nowadays, many sociological studies have shown that although it is invisible, children tend to have the same interests, personalities and habits with their friends, because they find it easy to express feelings together.
Secondly, the counter-argument raised by objectors to this is that family is the most outstanding influence on their offspring, because the traditional education of the family is taught by parents when their children were very young. In other words, parents can follow their childrens and encourage them to avoid enticement in contemporary society. This argument could be true to some extent; however, it is incomplete. What they fail to take into account is the fact that the ever-changing world is accompanied by the growing independence of people. As a result, self-sufficient children are able to approach outside communities very soon.
In conclusion, it cannot be denied that family has big effects on children, but other impacts play a more powerful role on the growth of children as mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many holds'.
Suggestion: Many holds
Many hold a belief that family plays the most imp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33448275862 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00943620999 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613793103448 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0268397029 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22159266719 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699613441662 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677039132422 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14121343784 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496797425583 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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