Some people say International sports events help in world peace. Do you agree or disagree?

Events like the football World Cup and The Olympics are watched by millions of people around the world. Even
though the primary focus of these events is to celebrate athletic prowess, I believe that they also help to create better
relationships between countries in three ways.

Firstly, international sports competitions offer countries a safe outlet for their rivalry. Although it might be argued that
there is sometimes violence between fans at sports events, in most cases matches between countries with difficult
political differences often pass without incident. Moreover, in these instances, the countries involved are able to
demonstrate their superiority on the sports field rather than the battlefield. The Olympic Games held during the cold
war between the Soviet Union and the Western Bloc provide a good illustration of this, with both groups doing
everything they could to beat their opponents, but in the safety of sport rather than war.

Another way in which sporting events promote peace is by giving better cultural understanding. Very often the host
nation of major sporting competitions rotates between countries and continents, allowing the rest of the world a
window into a particular society for a few weeks. Opening ceremonies, in particular, are a chance to show to the
world the unique culture of the organising country. Moreover, the spectators who come to watch the sport experience
the customs and traditions of the country and then take those experiences back with them. All of this helps promote
cultural understanding and acceptance, which is a key factor to peace.

Finally, major sporting events are a time when the world focuses its eyes in one direction. They are a time to put
disputes aside and celebrate the achievements of mankind as a whole. With so many competitors from so many
countries striving towards the same goal, it is a time to remember that despite our many differences, we are all
humans who want to achieve the same things in life. I believe that in this way sport has a unique ability to cross
cultural boundaries and reveal the similarities between all mankind.

In short, major sporting events are able to help promote cultural understanding and highlight the essential sameness
of the human race. As a result, I strongly agree that they help to advance peace in the world.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, in particular, in short, as a result, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 382.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22251308901 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79012525461 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557591623037 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4996995073 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.352941176 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222580376182 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075041821752 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540478477521 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0590366267052 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518358918308 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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