Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Not many individuals think that music acts as a bridge which connects the humankind of various cultures and ages together.
In Indian mythology there is a belief that a singer called Tansing has lid the lamps by using the energy of singing. That is the enormous power that music carries within. So I totally agree with the belief that music brings the different society together.
To begin with, every part of the society as a different culture which gives birth to various kinds of music. When people listen to this they get an opportunity to understand the value, feeling present in it. In addition to this it increases the respect by reducing the differences between the people. For instance legendary sitar player Pandit Ravi Shankar performed in front of western people In the 1960s with that he introduced Indian Classical music to the world. As a result of this, George Harrison of Beatles was influenced by Indian music. In coming years both legendary artists collaborated with each other and gave some of the best concerts to the people of the world. By this they brought two cultures together [western and eastern culture].
Furthermore, as a matter of fact music can also bind different ages together. Almost every home there will be some music will be playing in the background, which keeps them active and even sometimes they get along with music and start singing or dancing together. For instance any part of the world in the marriage they play music in which almost all people of all ages involved and they start dancing and singing. They forget their age, their problems in that moment. They behave just like a disciple of music who enjoys that moment.
To sum it up, music is one gift to this world which has an ability to bring all the ages and cultures together and make this world a better place to live.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, even so, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a matter of fact, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76025236593 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3335563008 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526813880126 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5325997783 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7647058824 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6470588235 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303104487141 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974212994793 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501255512514 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162104336675 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590917692543 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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