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Some people say that only the way to reduce the crime rate is to make the prison sentence longer. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: Some people say that only the way to reduce the crime rate is to make the prison sentence longer. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some that lengthier prison time is the only way to control criminal activities. While I belive that this step would help to lower crime rate, I feel that it is not only solution available.

On the one hand, I accept longer incarceration can serve to deter potential law breakers by instilling fear in their minds. To explain, most criminals being impulsive by nature are strongly deterred by the stringent and disciplined conditions of prisons. Spending a long time provides an opportunity for the prison service to rehabilitate a prisoner. For example, someone who has committed a serious offence such as assault will need a long time in order to be sure he can be re-educated and not to re offend. Such a step could be particularly effective as they would know that the price to pay is extremely heavy and hence would think twice before acting.

On the other hand, I believe that other than long term punishment, moral education can also help bring down crime rates in the long run too. Students, from young age should be inculcated with the correct moral values, like honesty is the best policy. Parents, while busy striving in their career should take out some time to shower care and concern to thier children, for it is sometimes the lack of parental love that cause the child to go astray and commit crimes. Additionally, improving the financial state of people could do wonders, as it is the pecuniary conditions that often motivate crime. As a result, government can work to sort out employment scenario and to rein in the rising inflation

In conclusion, although increasing the span of jail sentence could be an effective measure, educational and financial reforms can also be used as potent tools to tackle this issue.

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'hence', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'for example', 'i feel', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232415902141 0.247107183377 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.177370030581 0.155533422707 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100917431193 0.0946595960268 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.045871559633 0.0501214627716 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0366972477064 0.0437548338989 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107033639144 0.122226691241 88% => OK
Participles: 0.039755351682 0.0403226058552 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67723738208 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0428134556575 0.0326793684256 131% => OK
Particles: 0.00917431192661 0.00163938923432 560% => OK
Determiners: 0.0825688073394 0.0861772015684 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0428134556575 0.021408717616 200% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0122324159021 0.011925033212 103% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1756.0 1933.35771543 91% => OK
No of words: 300.0 316.048096192 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85333333333 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.316666666667 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25 0.28420135186 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193333333333 0.203846283523 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126666666667 0.137316102897 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67723738208 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.56093040696 111% => OK
Word variations: 70.8694942905 60.7387585426 117% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.7743622355 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6963919279 49.517814964 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.333333333 127.492653851 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7743622355 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 0.814263465372 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 50.0 49.1944974215 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.45882352941 1.69124875643 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43103296171 0.332605444948 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0938235497003 0.102741220458 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0547574934497 0.0668466124924 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.560661072128 0.534860350844 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170214556533 0.148594505496 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185027560026 0.134430193775 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671192657208 0.0742795772207 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.273463895671 0.324371583561 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0722862894172 0.0638462369009 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276022236842 0.228012699653 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999564843948 0.058150111329 172% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 11.0 10.4468937876 105% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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