Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child‘s
development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends
have the most significant influence.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A growth of children is affected by many factors in their life. It's often argued that parents have the greatest impact on the children's development whilst others disagree and think technology such as television or smartphone and friends are the most dramatic effects. This essay agrees that All of these factors influence on children's upbringing. This essay will discuss both points of view.
It is clear that all of children are really keen on watching cheerful programs on the television. Therefore, many parents have tended to have children spending much time for that because of avoiding children's hyperactivity. This factor make kid who can imitate many behaviors on television especially violent acts. For instance, a recent survey in Quebec about evolution of children found that accessing to many technological equipments including smartphone, television and other devices which can cause many negative consequences. Rising by 10 percent of violent abilities in school or dropping by almost 9% of physical activation of children. Furthermore, child are not distraction on their studies.
On the down side , friend is the one of factors which affect to be child's development prospects. A rate of time that children are in school and play with their friends accounting about 60 percent of their uptime so this will somewhat impact on growing up children by imitating the way to dress or how to talk in order to be similar with their partners. It is evidence that, When children get to live in life connected many friends who are self- starter or funny people then children will tend to be open-minded or become to be brisk person. However, Living in an environment with people who are close myself, children will be depression and few words so this is reason why friends is the factor playing substantially in growing up children.
On the other side, many disagree and feel that parents have cared and stayed with their children since they were born therefore they will be influenced by mother's principle, father's upbringing or attitude of parents So it is not really difficult to understand when some people agree that parents have the most important role in a child‘s development. Family life is very clealy evidention. Living in a happy house which help to have possitive atmosphere for children or living with pattern rules creating a good habit, gradually children became to be decent.
In conclusion, progressing and interacting of children can be impacted by many factors, they can be entertainment such as internet or television, education by parents, teachers and so on. Each agents has a certain impact on growing up children therefore This essay is individual opinion, it is not easy to generalize which factor has the most considerate influence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2328.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 451.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16186252772 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83564114059 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516629711752 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 506.74238477 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.0784587563 49.4020404114 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.526315789 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7368421053 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180559873668 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607926211498 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769931018363 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120829058243 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768886710701 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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