Some people say that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet, and they can study just as well as at home. To what you extend do you agree or disagree ?
In light of swift advancements in technology, there has been a prevailing nations that formal education is no longer necessary for children. It has been suggested that they can opt homeschooling and seek knowledge solely from the Internet. This essay will examine both sides of the argument before conclusion is drawn.
In the contemporary world, the advances in technology, have brought a major improvement in human’s study. Admittedly, there are some arguments in favor of school are no necessary because children can get information on the Internet. First, improvement’s technology for education are believed to equalize educational opportunities among young adolescents regardless of their backgrounds. This Internet information support, presumably tends not only to increase the overall tech-savvy rate of lower-income people but also to mitigate their feeling of inferiority when going to school, which eventually promotes an egalitarian society. Second, school are no necessary when children can access information on the Internet would probably result in a greater supply of highly qualified workers, which benefits society in the long run. In fact, it is acknowledged that skilled and knowledgeable human capital is imperative to foster economic growth and technological development in any nations.
Nevertheless, the resultant problem would be far more significant than the minor once benefits once children study at home. First, all people studying at home would likely correspond with a tremendous financial strain on a country. Generating no income from school tuition and fees, school could become over-reliant on the state budget for funding, meaning that there would be less input to develop other important areas such as the healthcare system and transport infrastructure. Second, children can get information on the Internet would tempt many young people including those who are not academically inclined or show no interest in college pursuits, thereby adding great burdens for university admission and enrollment staff and potentially wasting time that these young people could have spent pursuing more suitable study paths. It, instead, would be a more study viable option if the resources were focused on supporting less-privileged yet gifted students.
In conclusion, despite the advantages of long-distance human connection and convenience, shopping online have many drawbacks than favorable points. It is, thus, hoped that netizens, especially the young generation, should consider using it sensibly while maintaining their good academic performance at school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'nation'?
Suggestion: nation
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77545691906 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09844124203 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642297650131 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0502743841 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.25 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248313951938 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786890872559 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915778535229 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129857410745 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631997452437 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.43 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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