Some people say that sports play an important role in society. Others think it is nothing more than a leisure activity.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Evaluating properly the importance of sports has been a heated topic in the past few years. While I consent to its implication for social joyfulness, I opine that sport also plays a pivotal role in today’s community.
On the one hand, it has been widely recognized that sports have become a prevalent leisure activity in many nations. Indeed, traditional sports are always integrated into festivals and celebration, aimed to help people have a whale of time. To be more specific, thanks to these activities, citizens are able to enlarge their circle of friends, socialize with acquaintances and, therefore, relax after a long time dealing with a hectic working schedule. In addition, sports have also been a top priority for residents after being engrossed in paper works. Particularly, according to a recent study, 80% of surveyed white-collar workers reported taking up sports after work in hopes of letting off steam, since a heavy workload usually leaves them stressful and mentality exhausted.
On the other hand, I believe that sports exert discernable positive influences on the whole population, which are far beyond its application for entertaining purposes. From a health perspective, no sooner do residents work out at the gym or take a gentle exercise than they can tighten their muscles, consume their calories and build up their immune system. As a result, getting involved in sporting events will contribute to a lower incidence of degenerative illnesses, such as obesity, metabolism disorders, leading to a lower expenditure for medical services. From an education perspective, if sports become mandatory subjects in schools, it will be scientifically proven to be beneficial for students, which fosters their passion for physical activities and instills the Olympic ideal. Therefore, it is an appropriate method of educating children to be a good team player, a vital skill when they pursue a successful future career.
In conclusion, while not disavowing the happiness brought about by sports, it seems to me that their essential role in the society should not be underestimated.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e society should not be underestimated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3734939759 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03635971699 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665662650602 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.350965361 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.230769231 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122156809554 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426148303725 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0208643485839 0.0667982634062 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701820048023 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298303152923 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.49 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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