Some people think that children should learn to paint or draw at school. Others believe it is just a waste of time.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
some people feel that learning to paint and to draw are important for children. others argue that it's just a thing pupils don't need. In my view, teaching to draw and paint at school is crucial.
On the one hand, it's understandable why some people think that they should avoid learning to draw at school. Many lessons taught at school are more crucial to focus on and pay attention to, as artistic lectures may result in waste of time for getting ready to be esteemed as a person needed in particular fields. By contrast,if math, physics, information technology and other classes like these are taught more and frequently, it will be easy to find a good job in our society where punctual sciences are required most to control, facilitate and redesign our life.
On the other hand, I would agree with those who believe that children should learn how to create new things using pencils and pens. Firstly,human brain can't improve in a desired way without art. The brain has two hemispheres engaged to each other and art impacts on the one of these which gives impetus to arise our talent hidden inside us. Secondly, drawing and painting is one of the best ways to spend our free time. For example,in the technology era, majority of us are addicted to phones and this implies that we sacrifice our spare time on social media. Finally, drawing and painting give us the chance to leave significant trails before death.
İn conclusion,while there are some reasons to believe that people should focus on academic subjects,my own view is that drawing and painting accomplish our character and help us acquire a great progress on direction to success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in particular, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82332155477 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55725922095 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628975265018 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5869623048 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382638738358 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129289093654 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903725347032 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22971927348 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737099102691 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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