Some people think that children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers. Others believe less control from teachers and parents will help children deal with adult life better. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.

Submitted by honza on Sun, 09/23/2018 - 03:25

One of the highly controversial issue today relates to how to raise children. While some people believe that strict tutoring from guardians and educators is undoubtable, some other feels that children should have more freedom to be better prepared to economically productive life. In my opinion, I believe that rules are here to be obeyed and young generation should listen their authorities. This essay will discuss both points of views and will support my personal opinion.

Without any doubts, children are so called mirror of their parents. People judge them based how they have been raised and this reflect involvement of their parents into they education. To well educate kids at home, guardian is the role model to them as well as the authority; in school teacher replaces parents. In modern era, with everywhere presented drugs, alcohol and another illegal substances, young generation experiment with it the earlier age than ever before. I believe that strict rules in young age is necessary and helps to raise well behaved individuals. For instance, in China, pupils are till finishing their tertiary education not allowed to party, drink alcohol or either smoke. In threat of serious punishment young Chinese do not even try it. This helps young generation to be more disciplined and focused in their adulthood.

From the other hand, getting more freedom to young ones might also benefit them. They might experience how to handle finance, how to take care of household or cooking in early stage of a life. For example, my friend have not been properly raised by his parents, however, he had finished his doctorate in Physic, has an amazing family and he is a great chef.

To sum up, giving freedom in matter of how to raise kids, I personally see more threats than benefits not only for individuals, but, as well for society. However, it is about an individual how his or her future is gonna be.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 459, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...oth points of views and will support my personal opinion. Without any doubts, children are so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98130841121 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56412599007 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601246105919 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5471445498 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0588235294 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8823529412 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22265289905 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653938237631 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652301175356 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126242858342 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12439817251 0.056905535591 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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