Some people think everybody should stay in school until 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Everyone has rightful author to choose either to study in school until 18 or to do nothing. Although some people argue that without educational background, everyone can become a successful person. I strongly believe that study in school until 18 can be another choice for person who wants to get a success.
There is no doubt that a school can help students to gain a brighter future, so students should stay in the school until 18. As a result, students become well-educated person. For example, Government in Indonesia gives a duty to Indonesian to study in school minimum 18 years. It means each student has to graduate from a university or college institute. Although its regulation is not be mentioned in law, Joko Widodo, an Indonesian President, hopes everybody tend to study to the higher level, so that she or he is ready to obtain a job in the future, and it can create better life. To get best result, government encourages people by giving funding or scholarships to students to finish their secondary school. To conclude, it is important that each student should study at school until 18.
On the other hand, most people assume that going to school is not paramount thing as people are able to get knowledge from other places even gaining based on their experience. There are some reasons about this case. Firstly, tuition fee for studying is getting higher every year, so sometimes it discourages people to continue their study to higher level. As a result, people tend to learn by themselves. They study based on their experiences and trough on internet. In addition, people have many choices to study in informal education places. It gives chances to them to choose what subject or theory that they really need to improve skills. Beside that, studying in school for long time just wastes of time and money. Without, school until 18, people tends to work directly and quickly. Therefore, they gain salary by themselves.
To sum up, there are different perspectives about study in school until 18. Both of them become a right choice depend on the life purpose of people.
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Essay evaluation report
Everyone has rightful author to choose
Everyone has a rightful author to choose
Everyone is a rightful author to choose
become well-educated person
become a well-educated person
people tends to work directly and quickly.
people tend to work directly and quickly.
is not paramount thing
is not a paramount thing
Sentence: Both of them become a right choice depend on the life purpose of people.
Description: The fragment choice depend on is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace depend with verb, past participle
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1683 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.728 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.49 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.299 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.447 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 589, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the best'.
Suggestion: get the best
...ture, and it can create better life. To get best result, government encourages people by...
^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'as to', 'for example', 'in addition', 'no doubt', 'as a result', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248120300752 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.165413533835 0.155533422707 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0601503759398 0.0946595960268 64% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0275689223058 0.0501214627716 55% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0501253132832 0.0437548338989 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.137844611529 0.122226691241 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0250626566416 0.0403226058552 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57134653482 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0651629072682 0.0326793684256 199% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00250626566416 0.00163938923432 153% => OK
Determiners: 0.0676691729323 0.0861772015684 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015037593985 0.021408717616 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00501253132832 0.011925033212 42% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2093.0 1933.35771543 108% => OK
No of words: 356.0 316.048096192 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87921348315 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384831460674 0.374742101984 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241573033708 0.28420135186 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.160112359551 0.203846283523 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0955056179775 0.137316102897 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57134653482 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.037074148 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530898876404 0.56093040696 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 57.3973106334 60.7387585426 94% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0891783567 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.1818181818 20.7743622355 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.06625365 49.517814964 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1363636364 127.492653851 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 20.7743622355 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.681818181818 0.814263465372 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 40.3391215526 49.1944974215 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.69072164948 1.69124875643 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351411726485 0.332605444948 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0579893133721 0.102741220458 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0528610931444 0.0668466124924 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.440411852927 0.534860350844 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162322150009 0.148594505496 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120645337554 0.134430193775 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812017581661 0.0742795772207 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.405359888835 0.324371583561 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0858035405707 0.0638462369009 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240309102516 0.228012699653 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539057083424 0.058150111329 93% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.41683366733 351% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 10.0 1.9629258517 509% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 19.0 10.4468937876 182% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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