Some people think that the government should give money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people think that the government should give money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays creators like painters and musicians hold the most vital position among our people and art has formed an integral part of everyone’s life. but it is a complex issue that should be advocated and funded by government or no. Admittedly there are valid arguments on both sides of the controversy with will be elaborated in this essay followed by a reasonable conclusion, however I believe that governments should fund them before they are supported by alternative sources. .

On the one hand, the supporters of artists put forward some compelling reasons to justify their point of view. Firstly, the most rational argument in favor of this assertion is that government would encourage talents to discover the best of them, which can enhance significant achievements not only to the art creators but also to the society. this is mainly because art and artists indispensable to modern life and have useful application in reality. Base on the survey of 1000 in England shows that a considerable number of people believe that painters with paintings on the walls of the city and street musician who perform in subway , bus or the street can to change atmosphere of city from a negative to positive. Secondly, this is amply is illustrated if the artists in the society have been supported from the government or related organization, they will force to leave the occupation and do unprofessional work in order to spending their routine life.

On the other hand, the opponent assert that the art activities is not important for human’s life and governments should focus on to eliminate people’s huge problems. For example rather than to allocate the budget for art and artists, the fund should be spend for crucial society’s need such as education, public transportation and etc.

To conclude, there are convincing arguments on both sides. In my opinion the governments have to devote a massive scholarship for developing art and artists. In addition they can to provide a center to find out talented persons and boosting their productivity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, as for, for example, in addition, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15476190476 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0006593349 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58630952381 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.8015726546 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.230769231 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5384615385 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127996962017 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448738764019 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298451641309 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716539077225 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279492072492 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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