Some people think the government should not spend on international aid because there are disadvantaged people in their country such as the unemployed and homeless Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some people think the government should not spend on international aid because there are disadvantaged people in their country, such as the unemployed and homeless.
Do you agree or disagree?

As many resources have been spent to support other countries, several debatable arguments related to whether governments should do charity activities for foreign countries and use these resources to support national issues or not have been lit. I advocate the former perspective due to the losses of the economy and negative effects reaped from these actions.

Firstly, it is true that international aids are resource-demanding activities such as human forces and money, this may cause shortages in national fundings. As a result, many domestic problems such as homelessness and unemployment would become severe, while these supports should have been used to alleviate these problems, which heavily impact society. These resources could help to build homes for the homeless and expand new industries to make more jobs for people. By doing this, governments could have abundance in their finances to support other nations. According to international reports, a dictator in many African countries donated millions of dollars to charity aids whereas starvation spread around their countries, causing millions of people suffering.

Furthermore, by spending too much attention on international issues, authorities would face unrest in other countries. By being involved too much in political issues, many governments unintentionally or intentionally spread doubts among people. Specifically, while running the supports in foreign countries, many private companies try to interfere with local authorities, expanding powers to gain benefits. This results in a fact that the purity of these governments would be deteriorated, which might lead to many illegal activities. In addition, depending heavily on external forces, poorer countries are likely to lose their internal motivation, which plays an essential role in developing a country. This is happening in some third countries, where citizens become inactive in resolving domestic issues, waiting for international aid.

In conclusion, first world countries should pay more attention to domestic issues rather than spend it on foreign countries, this could help them get more resources to deal with negative impacts on the economy and politics.

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, third, whereas, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75766871166 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01553713086 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585889570552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5478990091 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.071428571 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195786941741 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639025616898 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417283217265 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110608396726 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599901214229 0.056905535591 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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