Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts this money should be spent elsewhere.
What extend do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued that nowadays authorities are directing a huge amount of money to artful works and this causes some disagreements among others. According to their opinions, the money should be spent for other purposes instead of arts. I completely disagree with that point of view because artistic creative ought to be supported by state as well as respected by human race in order to show one particular nation's rich and cultural heritages.
Firstly, it is absurd to count the money which is being spent on the artistic works .Because the governments know what they should do or not to improve their cultural and educational condition.I personally believe that the arts can be a view of communication with people and history. Taking museums as an example, there we can find various types of historical collections of objects which are artificially created and aimed to illustrate the backgrounds such as lifestyle and tradition of one particular community.
Admittedly, this can be a main and real life resource to give a piece of information about past times.Additionally, the works of art play a crucial role to transmit one particular traditional customs to the next generations.So that states should spend much money and pay more attention to the art performance than before.
Secondly, in my opinion directing the amount for other purposes such as launching approaches to help people or establishing types of charities is itself a money waste, I think.
Believing that arts can be a mirror which shows the city's economical and fashionable condition. It means that as arts are a huge field including different types of branches such as music, fashion, wearing style, drawing therefore, from one aspect of art, the current situation of nation can be obvious.
In conclusion, I reaffirm my position again that the artistic works should be valued and supported by society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15309446254 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98850659754 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583061889251 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.3922711039 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.2 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294154578082 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11332521521 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763839919832 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136481342264 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545615068308 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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