Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
After the male-dominated eras, the terms feminism has attracted worldwide attention which has been striking for women's rights. In fact, some people continuously hold their belief that men are more competitive than women in a natural way. As far as I am concerned, I wholeheartedly oppose to this arguement, I strongly believe that competitiveness in both gender is an undoubted resemblance.
There is conspicuous reasons demonstrating why people support that male is more competitive than female. They often argue that it has been admitted inevitably throughout history that competitivenss is in men's blood since family and school rivalries between boys have been recorded to exceed that of girls. Genetically, this trend has been interpreted by numerous scientists, scholars and reseachers around the world. Another proof for competitiveness among men is conflicts in male-dominated sports. The unforgettable night in the NBA history is often cited as an example when there was a chao between Dennis Rodman and his opponents.
On the contrary, I would argue that the competitive rate among men and women are equal. To begin, apart from male, female also participates and competes in sports that require high physical conditions with agressive rivalries between athletics. To illustrate, the Olympics has included both enormously competitive traditional and modern sports such as the Judo tournament and swimming competition. Moreover, women have contributed to numerous men's sport events such as NBA or World Cup which are respectively called WNBA or Fifa women World Cup. In addition to this, competition in work places and jobs are noteworthy because these trends have emerged due to shifts in attitude towards female employees. According to a survey carried out by Havard University, there is a substantial figure for uprising for feminism against traditional and sexual bias to open a new career path for women. Consequently, this has led to a truth that the number of women competing for top positions with higher remuneration is propagating.
To put things in a nutshell, although people believe that men are morw competitive than women, I hole the contradictory view that their roles are similar and rivalries among individual gender remains a similitude. I suggest that governments should publicise appropriate laws and regulations to neither underestimate the position of men nor polarise that of women.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'terms'' or 'term's'?
Suggestion: terms'; term's
After the male-dominated eras, the terms feminism has attracted worldwide attent...
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Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a natural way" with adverb for "natural"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...hat men are more competitive than women in a natural way. As far as I am concerned, I wholeheart...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'There are conspicuous reasons'?
Suggestion: There are conspicuous reasons
...th gender is an undoubted resemblance. There is conspicuous reasons demonstrating why people support that m...
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Line 2, column 582, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is often cited as an example when there was a chao between Dennis Rodman and his...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, apart from, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44533333333 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14870442493 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597333333333 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4681005859 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.117647059 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234789750947 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797003503597 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940526523268 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156094622361 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527455621418 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'terms'' or 'term's'?
Suggestion: terms'; term's
After the male-dominated eras, the terms feminism has attracted worldwide attent...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a natural way" with adverb for "natural"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...hat men are more competitive than women in a natural way. As far as I am concerned, I wholeheart...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'There are conspicuous reasons'?
Suggestion: There are conspicuous reasons
...th gender is an undoubted resemblance. There is conspicuous reasons demonstrating why people support that m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 582, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is often cited as an example when there was a chao between Dennis Rodman and his...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, apart from, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44533333333 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14870442493 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597333333333 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4681005859 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.117647059 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234789750947 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797003503597 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940526523268 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156094622361 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527455621418 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.