Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
People have different views about whether we are relying on each other these days. In my opinion, the modern world forces us to be more independent.
On the one hand, there are two key reasons why some hold a belief that the dependence trend is more popular. Firstly, since the high cost of living in the modern world, young adults can not afford their lives with work remuneration and savings. Therefore, they need to depend on their parents' financial support to pay for their bills or to buy houses. A good example of that case is my friend who was planning to run her own business. She had to borrow her parents' money for that because of her insufficient savings. Secondly, people seem to be more ambitious nowadays, and they focus too much on their work. As a result, they do not have enough time for their children and have to rely on grandparents or babysitters to take care of their offsprings.
On the other hand, I would argue that people have become more independent than they used to be. Firstly, as technology is getting more developed, people may not rely on others for their quests. In fact, they can search for a wealth of helpful information on the Internet. For instance, the Internet can enable students to do their homework alone and encourage self-studying, teachers are just people who guide them to have access to the right websites. Moreover, in most countries, as many youngsters decide to move out to build up their own homes, families have become smaller. This means that people do not count on relatives as much as they used to. We also see the trend of traveling alone in the young generation in recent years.
In conclusion, I personally believe that people are more independent in deciding their lives in the modern world despite some opposite thoughts.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72756410256 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55607517478 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567307692308 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4641146882 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7647058824 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3529411765 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23529411765 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266331525208 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906401002725 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672533148009 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192269361558 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491030083067 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72756410256 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55607517478 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567307692308 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4641146882 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7647058824 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3529411765 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23529411765 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266331525208 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906401002725 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672533148009 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192269361558 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491030083067 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.