Some people think the money spent in developing the technology for space exploration is not justified. There are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extend do you agree or disagree?(2018.12.01

There is a controversial issue that a myriad wealth is invested in researching outer space while it is a lengthy process or this great amount of money should be utilized financially for other fields. From my perspective, although, space exploration is essential, the importance of population explosion and protecting ozone depletion cannot be neglected by the government.
When it comes to space research, conspicuously, it makes a significant contribution to the current modernizing society. There is no doubt that most of the achievement in the technological media transportation sectors are all the accomplishments in launching satellite navigation systems into the universe. As a result, the liaison between human has tremendously alleviated the connecting disparity when people live in two different hemispheres. Particularly, the effective subservience of the internet and radio wave brings out a massive chance for the man to have a closer connection with their relationship whenever they want.
In comparison with exposing the cosmos, obviously, the utmost important investment is still addressed the existing problems in the Earth, such as the scarcity of accommodation and the greenhouse gases which damaged badly to the human habitat. Affirmatively, if there are more funds are raised to tackle these key obstacles, the living standard for mankind will ameliorate to the completely new level. As a consequence, this amount of money generates an immaterial tension, making people live more dedicate and more conscientious, simultaneously, it contributes the most to the development of the country. Apparently, spending money in this way is more meaningful for mankind than in space explorations.

To conclude, developing on the technology in space exploration is crucial, however, solving the existing issues could not be eclipsed.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...ir relationship whenever they want. In comparison with exposing the cosmos, obviously, th...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, however, if, so, still, while, no doubt, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6678700361 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40942573108 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642599277978 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.1900444068 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.727272727 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1818181818 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225803907298 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810512504815 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823565315965 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123145685554 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562192478192 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.75 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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