Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should try to reduce environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should try to reduce environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I completely agree to the statement that government needs to control pollution and housing issues to prevent certain illnesses and diseases. A government may have several other ways to improve public health, but none has shown more effective than reducing pollution and resolving housing issues since these two are the man-made and root causes for most of the new epidemics.

Pollution is man-made, and so are the consequences it has on human health. Alteration to environment, be it in its chemical composition or physical properties, in which we live, negatively impacts our health. In other words, our body reacts to the changes in the surroundings which later presents as diseases. This was proved by the Singapore government, when it successfully reduced the skin disorders’ incidence among its citizens after halting the environment polluting lead factory operations. Therefore, a government can improve public health if it protects the environment from pollution.

Improper housing, especially over-crowding, is one another etiology for some diseases to prevail and spread, yet a reversible cause by the government. Congested way of living has more chances for certain infections to transmit easily, so a standard surface area per individual for constructing a new home must be set by the government. Indian government tackled the spread of tuberculosis in cities that contain closely knitted housings by displacing the people to newly built homes, which has been constructed as per basic health standards. Thus, the housing problems, a cause for the spread of certain infections, can be curbed by government if it were to mandate stringent rules for construction of residential buildings.

To conclude, it is believed by some, and I, that a government should attempt to control pollution as well as housing issues to prevent few illnesses and diseases. As they are the two main man-made causes for poor public health, the government has the responsibility to control and also these two factors have shown to be correctable by Indian and Singapore government.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.3376753507 288% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41538461538 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09810249237 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563076923077 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1966468211 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.384615385 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181200458049 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711735262121 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771764810491 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118743684248 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502768837207 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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