Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should try to reduce environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
I completely agree to the statement that governement needs to control pollution and housing issues to prevent certain illnesses and diseases. A government may have several other ways to improve public health, but none has shown more effective than reducing pollution and resolving housing issues since these two are the man-made and root causes for most of the new epidemics.
Pollution is man-made, and so are the consequences it has on human health. Alteration to environment, be it in its chemical composition or physical properties, in which we live, negatively impacts our health. In other words, our body reacts to the changes in the surroundings which later presents as diseases. This was proved by Singapore government, when it successfully reduced the skin disorders’ incidence among its citizens after halting the enviroment polltuing lead factory operations. Therefore, a government can improve the public health if it protects the enviroment from pollution.
Improper housing, especially over-crowding, is one another etiology for some diseases to prevail and spread, yet a reversible cause by the government. Congested way of living has more chances for certain infections to transmit easily, so a standard surface area per individual for contructing a new home must be set by the government. Indian government tackled the spread of tuberculosis in cities that contain closely knitted housings by displacing the people to newly built homes, which has been constructed as per basic health standards. Thus, the housing problems, a cause for spread of certain infections, can be curbed by government if it were to mandate stringent rules for construction of residential buildings.
To conclude, it is believed by some, and I, that a government should atempt to control pollution as well as housing issues to prevent few illnesses and diseases. As they are the two main man-made causes for poor public health, government has the resposibility to control and also these two factors have shown to be correctable by Indian and Singapore government.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.3376753507 288% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41176470588 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08153287754 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569659442724 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0164992764 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.461538462 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8461538462 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176973170513 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692804548069 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774673003352 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115973903287 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052906277941 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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