Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them, and education and training are better solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (
Due to the threats from criminals to our society in various ways nowadays, many people suggest that training and education should be used to tackle the issue instead of the traditional method of putting them in the prison. I totally disagree with this opinion.
It is understandable why many people advocate the idea of educating offenders. They often say that if these individuals are given suitable learning programs or apprenticeship, they would have necessary skills to make their ends meet after getting out of prison, and potentially would not get involved in any illegal activities. However, I would argue that this belief is misguided and unconvincing. Most of criminals have gone through formal education at primary and secondary levels, in which they have learnt a lot of knowledge and skills which are useful for most of the occupations in the contemporary society, but still have committed law-breaking actions. Therefore, educating these law-breakers cannot make sure that they would not do any criminal activities again.
Incarceration, on the other hand, is the far more effective solution to address the issue of crime for several reasons. Firstly, it helps ensure that anyone acting against the will of others would have to get the consequence of losing freedom, which modern citizens are highly afraid of. This also means not only making the public more aware about avoiding breaking the laws but also protecting the society from the offenders in a certain period. Secondly, many prisons nowadays do have rehabilitation programs to help bring the ex-criminals back to the society naturally and effectively by encouraging them to do voluntary work for the society. This could be exemplified by Vietnam, where thousands of prisoners are rehabilitated annually after 3 to 5 years of doing unpaid work for local community. These people then come back to their hometown, welcomed by the both their family and neighbors, and then establishing their own business for the rest of their life.
In conclusion, my view is that providing learning opportunities to offenders is an unrealistic strategy to deal with the issue of crime, but traditional methods, including incarceration and rehabilitation, are still working effectively both in theory and in practice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the criminals') or simply say ''Most criminals''.
Suggestion: Most of the criminals; Most criminals
...s belief is misguided and unconvincing. Most of criminals have gone through formal education at p...
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Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[6]
Message: 'He' in subjunctive clause must be used base form of the verb: 'act'.
Suggestion: act
...s. Firstly, it helps ensure that anyone acting against the will of others would have t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30470914127 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98248815765 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592797783934 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.2597222556 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.785714286 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179407069146 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616078247794 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552804150158 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119425385606 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055648915669 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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