some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays competition is seen crucial for success. Many companies want their employees have sense of competition as well as co-operation. So ignoring any of these topics is none sense, and these qualifications must be built when the children are in small ages.

Excessive sense of competition usually decreases the success. However using it in a hasty manner may increase the success in high rates so the parents have to be more careful while educating their children about sense of competition. But it should be taught hastily because it may be resulted in childrens rejection for the education.

On the other hand co-operating is crucial too for success. Variety is important for a better view so another person might has a better view than the others. This is the reason why children should be taught co-operation as well. However there are some cons and pros of it too as well as excessive sense of competition. If you teach your children only co-operation rather than teaching both co-operation and sense of competition eventually your child will lose his or her self confidence and would not able to complete a task by him or herself.

I believe that I will teach my children both sense of competition and co-operating in a balanced way. It is crucial that a child should complete a task by him/herself as well as with a group. Nevertheless, there will not be her/his parents beside him/her whenever he/she needs help. This is the reason why these things should be taught equally.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...decreases the success. However using it in a hasty manner may increase the success in high rates ...
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... should be taught co-operation as well. However there are some cons and pros of it too ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1245.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94047619048 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84915937088 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4874014625 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354721862247 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117322426664 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768664945683 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215209173921 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05280174628 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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