Some people think that sports involving violence such as boxing and martial arts should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions To what extent do you agree

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Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, it is undoubted that sports involving violence such as boxing and martial arts have a wide coverage from media to international competitions, which has been a controversial problem. Some individuals claim that this genre of sport ought to be prohibited due to its negative influences on the society. Nevertheless, I wholeheartedly believe this statement is awfully wrongheaded.
To commence with, this policy will definitely exert a negative impact on human beings’ development. A great number of people in the world have a passion for these sports, which make them willingly apply themselves to develop skills and capacities with the aim of achieving their dream jobs. As a result, if there is a veto on their jobs, people especially juvenility will have to suffer from frustration and depression and find it difficult to start a completely new career.
Furthermore, there is no denying that a ban on brutal sports will lead to a significant fall in the national economy. Initially, people working in that field will be made redundant, which is a factor for an increasing rate of unemployment. Therefore, the government has to spend a great deal of money with a view to providing more social welfare. In addition, imposing the strict restriction on rough sports will disrupt the diversity of sports. This situation will lead to a significant decrease in the number of spectators of sport channels along with many sport competitions and consequently, the profit of each sport clubs. There is a likelihood that many nations will have to suffer from an economic crisis on the grounds that violent sports make a enormous contribution to the GDP of that country.
To sum up, I totally believe that dangerous sports should not be forbidden.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (5 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, as to, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15034965035 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0784722737 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583916083916 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1802275673 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.307692308 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242380791267 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822050696735 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700842508027 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152190500247 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668599581991 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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