Some people think that sports play an important role in the development of society Others think they are nothing more than a leisure activity Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people think that sports play an important role in the development of society. Others think they are nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sports, nowadays, are becoming popular to humans and they also raise a controversial issue in modern society. Some people hold the opinion that it is critical to play sports because of various benefits they bring, while there are some opposite perspectives that sports are just activities serving humans’ entertainment. These different views are discussed in this essay and my opinion is given based on the discussion.

In the development of society, the living standard of people is getting improved which means
they are responsible to work hard to satisfy their desires and family as well. Therefore, they put more concentration on their work and their family than sports which are considered leisure activities. For them, earning a living is more meaningful than sports because these activities can not meet their basic needs and other demands for their family which salary can afford. In other words, time is too important for those who are workaholics so that sports are unnecessary in their life.

In contrast, it is more convincing to give the opinion that sports play an essential role in people’s life. One of the benefits sports bring to people is that these activities can help people to improve their health and strengthen resistance, especially in Covid 19 pandemic period. The fact that practicing sports play an effective function in blood circulation helps reduce stress and the risk of heart attack as well so that people have more energy for more productive work. Furthermore, sports contribute to developing tourism and commerce of a nation by the huge profit many sporting events bring about. It is undeniable that sporting events generate tremendous financial wealth for many countries which are famous for the sport industry.

In conclusion, although for many people sports play a less important role in their life than earning a living, they still are dispensable because of the advantages about health and profit for the national economy they bring back.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 425, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Line 6, column 36, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'giving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: giving
.... In contrast, it is more convincing to give the opinion that sports play an essenti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2375 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68604611837 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534375 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4516186221 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.923076923 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31162819642 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12021823342 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705442858188 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163692716128 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561296384248 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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