Some people think that what children watch on television will influence their behaviours. Others think that the time they watch television influences their behaviour most. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?
People hold divergent ideas whether the content or the time that children spend on TV programmes impacts their behaviour most. Both views will be discussed in this essay, followed my own opinion that the behaviour of youngsters are influenced by both sides equally.
People supporting the idea that children are affected by what they watch on TV may put forth the following reasons. First of all, one of the characteristics of young children is imitating other’s behaviour. If they are exposed to the TV programmes which contain a lot of violent or gory scenes, the possibility of them to mimick such behaviour will increase. In addition, it is acknowledged that children are naturally immature, hence the development of their morals and value system will be impacted by the types of television they watch. One piece of research conducted by America reveals that more than 20% of young criminals blame their illegal behaviour to the wrong social value conveyed by mass media.
Nevertheless, those who believe teenagers’ behaviours is mainly influenced by the time they are exposed to screen also possess some sound points. To begin with, the long time spent by young children on TV makes them be vulnerable to some ailments such as short-sightedness and obesity. For instance, the Times has reported that due to the increasing time of watching TV, the rate of children in British who are suffering from eye problems and obesity has grown significantly. Moreover, spending too much time on TV impedes children to cultivate a bonded and closed relationship with their parents, which leads to an isolated living habit and hampers the development of their social skills.
In conclusion, I believe the content watched by children and the time they spend in front of TV place an equal value on cultivating teenagers’ behaviour altogether.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
blame their illegal behaviour
blame their illegal behaviours
flaws:
'is/are' and 'will be' are over used in the essays.
--------------------
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1503 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.01 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.796 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.385 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98119103715 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.7230857053 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.416666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356837958611 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126017986066 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574810559966 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216242285501 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675937993533 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.