Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Although many people feel that zoos are a safe place to protect endangered animals, others say that wild animals have been cruelly treated, therefore, zoos ought to be shut down. This essay will discuss the question from both points of view and explain why I agree with the latter group.

On the one hand, some individuals supported that putting wild animals in zoos is a good way to protect them from the negative impact of human activities and natural disasters. This is demonstrated that zoos can preserve endangered animals by keeping them safe from poachers, and other threats such as the spread of urbanization, forests fire, and tropical storm. which leads to habitat destruction of animals. Other zoos also run breeding programs to try and increase the number of rare animals for conservation as well as prevent them from becoming extinct.

There is a more convincing reason why zoos should be closed down. To begin with, many animal species have been caging as a working tool that they are trained for the entertainment purpose of visitors. As a result, many species feels exhausted or even battered, which impacts their health. For instance, a zoo namely Moon Zoo in the USA is accused of taking advantage of endangered animals to make money without allowing the government. Furthermore, if the prime reason is animal conservation in zoos, this could be better in other environments such as wildlife parks or natural reserves where the animals have more freedom.

In conclusion, I believe both arguments have merits. On balance, however, I think the government should interfere with the violations of zoos in protecting endangered animals and encouraging the opening of other reserves that have more useful to preserve wild animals

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...tion, forests fire, and tropical storm. which leads to habitat destruction of animals...
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Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tion, forests fire, and tropical storm. which leads to habitat destruction of animals...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...ther zoos also run breeding programs to try and increase the number of rare animals for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14335664336 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68455199323 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0400903122 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.153846154 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6153846154 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32259356976 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111028957633 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866698620526 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205312387743 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326373937347 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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