Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no denying that ex-prisoners can become normal, productive members of society. Some people argue that allowing these people to talk to teenagers is the best way of discouraging them from breaking the law. I completely agree with this idea owing to its positive impacts on teenagers' view and absolute advantages over other educational methods.
Perhaps the most important reason why reformed offenders are more suitable to talk to teenagers is their background, which make them and their stories more reliant than anyone else. Naturally, teenagers are more likely to accept advice from those who can speak from their own experience. Any wrong ideas about criminals leading glamour lives can be dispelled with the vivid and shocking nature of their stories. For instance, my school holds a course which is under the co-operation with local centers for ex-prisoners each year, and in this way, these people can tell teenagers about how they are involved in a crime, the dangers of committing a crime, and what life in prison is really like.
Other alternatives to using reformed prisoners to educate teenagers would be much less effective. One usual option is that the police can visit the classroom and talk to students about the dangers of criminal lifestyles. This might be useful in terms of informing teenagers about what is waiting for law-breakers if they are caught, but young people are often reluctant to receive advice from figures of authority. A second option is for teachers to speak to teenagers, but I do not think that they are considered as a credible source of information.
In conclusion, I tend forwards to the idea that choosing people who turn their lives around after serving a prison sentence is the best option to deter teenagers from breaking the law.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, second, so, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06081081081 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64950172418 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574324324324 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9510988013 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.833333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284146383287 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970217426821 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080056579487 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173830923634 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402477783017 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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