Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel. Do you think advantages outweight disadvatages?
Nowadays, taking a gap-year after high school to travel is seemed to be a phenomenon in our society. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, I believe that these are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, there are two major drawbacks that students should not spend one year off to travel. Firstly, it can not deny that traveling is very expensive and particularly students are incapable to earn money by themselves. This amount of money should be saved for learning in university in stead of traveling. Not only do the students waste the money but also waste the time for travelling. One year after high school is a good time to training or learning more about the major knowledge such as English or computer which did not mentioned much in high school.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. One reason for this view is that students set aside time for taking journeys to broaden their knowledge. My friend, for example, he chose to be a real traveler escape from the long lasting theory to gain knowledge and ethnic minority culture throughout the country to decide what he likes and who he want to be. Another reason is that young people will be more confident and good at soft skills in daily life after having one year to immerse themselves in the real world. Therefore, they are able to deal with the problems and come over the difficulty situations because of being equipped with knowledge and skills in theory and real life.
In conclusion, I would argue that the advantages of this trend are more significant than the disadvantages such as expand the horizon and enhance the soft skills that can not buy by money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ntry to decide what he likes and who he want to be. Another reason is that young peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59982542008 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552542372881 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0019482868 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.923076923 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177606111277 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659374325574 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651223228678 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104784492619 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633201351085 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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