Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

Since the world is going to be more technological and modern relying upon the state-of-the-art, in order to get accorded with this rapid evolution, students ought to constantly strive and make their best effort in the all education years. With thus lie of the land, there are only numerable students who are vigorous enough to attend a university immediately after finishing school studies, whiles most of the youngsters turn drained of formal schooling and they prefer to take comfort for two or three years traveling or working. In my own perspective, on the one hand, education is not only about theoretical learning, but also concerns about the students social interactions and their involvement in other activities apart from studying. On the other hand, there has been always a debated issue for adolescents about their future occupation and how they will go through the life. Consequently, running a business is the best possible way to draw on their knowledge and make the applied. Although it appears as all profits, the drawbacks are also determinative.

To start with, it has multiple advantages but the fundamental ones will be explicated in this paragraph. One of the predominant upper hand is getting practicbly familiar with the working conditions and even other walks of life. This fact, provides a great opportunity to turn abstract into operative knowledge. Secondly, workmen will experience ebb and flow of life and learn how to tackle with pressing problems. Therefore, they will be more experiensed which gives them a broader view of life.

Nevertheless, there are also some downsides involved in such a break. To clarify, educating procces will be disrupted. As a result, the former students may not show interest toward higher studies or they may find it difficult to readapt to an acadamic environment, while a few of them continue to work in the same sector and boost their career.

As a conclusion, This hiatus between school and university courses could be beneficial for youths. However, taking too much break will automatically discourage them to restart. Thus, in my point of view, taking up a job for a few years before going to university is acceptable as long as they try to keep themselves in touch with the academic studies.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, as a result, to start with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11559139785 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90407569201 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599462365591 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2264700177 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.941176471 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160361300454 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489950166665 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560362994067 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100925920797 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662709719803 0.056905535591 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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First of all, thanks a million for your pleasant website. It helped me estimate my English knowledge.
Secondly, I have a suggestion for you. In my opinion, it would be better to show what are our mistakes rather than just evaluating by grades.
And the other thing I like to know is that what whitespaces are. I mean, I tried not to have whitespaces in my essey and I think my spaces were OK, just I don't know where those errors come from.

Thanks again for paying attention to the member's comments

The e-grader will give warning messages, like:

'More relative clauses wanted.'

'Less adverbial clause wanted.'

If the warning messages appear again in other essays, then you will need to pay attention to them. and put more relative clauses and less adverbial clause.

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