There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found everywhere around the world. In my opinion, music is a vital part of our lives for a range of reasons, and I argue that traditional music is more important in comparison with popular international music.
Music is something that accompanies with all of us throughout our lives. Firstly, as children, we are taught songs by our parents and teachers as a mean of leaning English and sometimes as a form of enjoyment. Children are pleasure in singing songs with others and it would appear that the act of singing creates the connection between participants, regardless of their age or gender. Secondly, later in life, many songs are released as a form of expression of composer’s stories and emotions. They deliver their experiences as well as their thoughts, which sometimes words cannot solely do, through songs to the audience and hopefully find an intensive empathy.
In my point of view, traditional music should be valued over the modern, international music that has so popular in many parts of the world. Modern and popular pop music are commonly catchy and fun, and it is simply a commercial product that is marketed and sold by businesspeople. In contrast, traditional music expresses culture, customs, and the history of a country. For example, Quan Ho folk singing in Vietnam describes the daily routines, lifestyles, and religion belief of former generations. By this way, the youths can connect and discover the past and it therefore largely contributes to the identity of Vietnamese culture.
In conclusion, music is a necessary part of the life of each people and I personally believe that traditional music should be given more important than international music because of its contribution to a culture and tradition of a country.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97480344822 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563333333333 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9292799488 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.538461538 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402743619313 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136303061008 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1383296866 0.0667982634062 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276976877185 0.151304729494 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132822251276 0.056905535591 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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