There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
It is thought that nowadays there are various different types of music in the world. The following essay will analyse the importance of music for individual's life and mostly agree with the statement that traditional music of a nation more significant than the international music.
In the industrialized world and with the appearance of modern technology such as automatic robots, the proportion of people who suffer from mental diseases has increased gradually, so music is greatly significant for the development of society. First and foremost, not only will music heal the pain of each person, as the result, their mental life can be improved, but also the number of depression's people will be reduced as the result of music's effect. Furthermore, music is one types of entertainment which keep necessary function for decreasing the stress and pressure of seniors and adolesences. To illustrate, teenagers prefer to participate in music clubs of their college or visit the music center after their studing time, this habit help them more comfortable and have more energy for the next lesson.
Looking at the importance of traditional music and international music, internation music have a profusion of benefit for the society which individuals will have more opportunities to approach with the international culture since this type of music provide numerous valuable knowlege and social experience. However, it is noticeable that the region also correlate with a wide range of cognitive behaviors, including menory, self-monitoring and consious self-awareness, so i believe traditional music of a country keep more essential role.
To conclude, through my argument from my essay, music is really significant for the improvement of society and also i consider that traditional music is more important than international music.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45070422535 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11040481792 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55985915493 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5347844248 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.0 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5555555556 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50089434294 0.244688304435 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.248050828655 0.084324248473 294% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122293294204 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.376855200497 0.151304729494 249% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933706120091 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.09 50.2224549098 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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It is thought that nowadays there are va...
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...ificant than the international music. In the industrialized world and with the...
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...have more energy for the next lesson. Looking at the importance of traditional...
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...itoring and consious self-awareness, so i believe traditional music of a country ...
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...f a country keep more essential role. To conclude, through my argument from my...
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...for the improvement of society and also i consider that traditional music is more...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45070422535 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11040481792 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55985915493 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5347844248 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.0 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5555555556 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50089434294 0.244688304435 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.248050828655 0.084324248473 294% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122293294204 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.376855200497 0.151304729494 249% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933706120091 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.09 50.2224549098 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.