There have been some controversial perspectives of students’ choices after finishing high school programs for the past few years. While individuals start searching for job opportunities right away, others continue to apply for tertiary education. From my point of view, this change would have both merits and demerits in an equal measure.
On the one hand, owning a certain job facilitates young people to lead a self-sufficient life. It could be attributed to their paying cost of living daily. To illustrate, they could purchase household expenses themselves without their parents’ support, such as electricity bills, water supply, groceries, et cetera. Additionally, this trend would contribute to expediting their success’s process. Adolescents could devote a large amount of time professionally training and practicing with experts in their field at the age of 18. Hence, they might become a fully skilled blue-collar or white-collar worker and establish their own business. Meanwhile, for example, undergraduates in Viet Nam take two years to access a theoretical knowledge base, and two years remain for internship in that profession. Therefore, students going to university spend a long time acquiring proficiency in their field.
On the other hand, this trend also inevitably triggers several downsides. Initially, young adults would confront sophisticated issues in their workplace from an early age. This roots in a complicated working environment and competition among colleagues to take promotion. As a result, they might continually suffer from stress and exhaustion after a hard-working day. Furthermore, employment opportunities could be curtailed for individuals not getting any certificates. Could be due to the more competitive job market, which necessitates applicants for requisite theoretical knowledge and hands-on experiences. Therefore, they would have difficulties in finding well-paid jobs.
In conclusion, after high school graduation, adolescents intend to work rather than enroll in a certain university. I opine that starting seeking jobs from an early age would result in both beneficial and detrimental impacts on young people.
There have been some controversial perspectives of students’ choices after finishing high school programs for the past few years. While individuals start searching for job opportunities right away, others continue to apply for tertiary education. From my point of view, this change would have both merits and demerits in an equal measure.
On the one hand, owning a certain job facilitates young people to lead a self-sufficient life. It could be attributed to their paying cost of living daily. To illustrate, they could purchase household expenses themselves without their parents’ support, such as electricity bills, water supply, groceries, et cetera. Additionally, this trend would contribute to expediting their success’s process. adolescents could devote a large amount of time professionally training and practicing with experts in their field at the age of 18. Hence, they might become a fully skilled blue-collar or white-collar worker and establish their own business. Meanwhile, for example, undergraduates in Viet Nam take two years to access a theoretical knowledge base, and two years remain for internship in that profession. therefore, students going to university spend a long time acquiring proficiency in their field.
On the other hand, this trend also inevitably triggers several downsides. Initially, young adults would confront sophisticated issues in their workplace from an early age. this roots in a complicated working environment and competition among colleagues to take promotion. As a result, they might continually suffer from stress and exhaustion after a hard-working day. Furthermore, employment opportunities could be curtailed for individuals not getting any certificates. could be due to the more competitive job market, which necessitates applicants for requisite theoretical knowledge and hands-on experiences. therefore, they would have difficulties in finding well-paid jobs.
In conclusion, after high school graduation, adolescents intend to work rather than enroll in a certain university. I opine that starting seeking jobs from an early age would result in both beneficial and detrimental impacts on young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85893416928 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23483936077 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664576802508 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5383369142 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.45 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.95 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352476827901 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943940186459 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158610677582 0.0667982634062 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255706635907 0.151304729494 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.266767918596 0.056905535591 469% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.41 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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