These days' children are surrounded by electronic devices such as personal
computers, tablet computers, and smart phones, and they learn to use them at
a very early age.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge
or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
With the increasing popularity of electronic devices nowadays there has been formed one striking feature of teaching young generation how to use them. this essay will suggest that the exacerbating the health condition is considered as the biggest drawback and escalation of horizon is the primary advantage.
The overuse of electronic devices might lead to harmful consequences such as the loss of vision . It can be explained by the fact that majority of children are tended to use their electronic gadget for a long time and , regarding this problem from scientific side , it becomes more obvious that children's pupils are decreasing in size , which in the long run can lead to the loss of vision. having conducted scientific research among people , who spend a lot of time on electronic devices in their childhood , Kazakh scientists have revealed that more that 67 percent of them have problems with eye's vision.
On the other hand , the main advantage is the expanding the horizon in general . If some children's playing games and hanging out together while other kids prefer spending their time by watching news , documentary films , the latter ones will be more notified about today's situation on the planet. For example , recently it was reported in new Your times that children spent their leisure time on electronic devices by watching news portals , participating in online competitions are much more prospective than those who did not use it at all.
In conclusion , using an electronic gadgets are crucial for development in general as well as abiding some rules regarding the time of usage these , and the this time can be not so dangerous .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in general, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08518518519 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74928794049 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603703703704 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.7561427564 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.555555556 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2222222222 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172903366836 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721635099521 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031974878241 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102899653449 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0102735943696 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.